Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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the
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more
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in improving a situation rather than accepting easier.
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pressured situations and stick
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traditional opinions because they do not want to change themselves according to fluctuated circumstances and
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pay attention to explore the new matters to solve these
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whatever they think that a difficult existence in daily
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tackle those
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each situation for sustainable
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to overcome
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been happening from accidental or unexpected circumstances.
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can
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if citizens cooperate and brainstorm to tackle
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these
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good opportunities
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or
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are the shortage of education, food and so on.
Thus
, supporting in many
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will help to pass those conditions. In conclusion, one statement in developing solutions is better than without the solve
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. Indeed, humanity should focus on the clause of each problem.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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