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In order to imporove the quality of education, high school students should be encouraged to evaluate and criticise their teachers, but other think it will result in loss of respect and discipline in classroom. What your opinion ?

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The graph illustrates cinema viewing in Great Britain in the
period
 of 16 years. It is clear that at the
first
 of the
period
 in 1984 the 15-24
age
group
 had the majority of attendance and
people
 35 and above had the minimum percentage of viewing. Overall, cinema attendance increased significantly between 1984 to 2000. At
first
, there was a slightly rose in most of the
age
 groups,
however
,
people
 between 15 to 24 had a remarkable growth of about 20 per
cent
, after that in the
next
 5 years viewers at 7-14 and 24-35 reach at same point about 15 per
cent
 of attendance and the
age
group
 of 15-24 experienced a
period
 of volatility and about 1994, had a marginal decline and reach about 40 per
cent
 of
people
. 35 and over
age
 category choose a stable path and remain relatively or had a negligible increase but, between 1996 and 2000, there was a meaningful rose about 10 per
cent
 in
this
age
group
. In 1996
people
 in the 15-24
group
 reach the peach of 50 per
cent
 of audiences
also
 other groups start climbing as well and at end of the
period
 had 30 per
cent
 of viewers.
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