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some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in correct place. What is your opinion about this?

#people #home #workplace #place
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 it is required to organize the surrounding, while others do not pay attention
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 how everything is managed. From my perspective, it's important to clean and organise your place, because it has
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 on your productivity.
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, the way
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of thinkings relay on what is around a person.
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, if an individual has a lot of tasks, he will complete
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 job until the deadline only if nothing can
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 tend to lose their attention.
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clean
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 workplace gives
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 to make
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high quality
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 work on time. It is apparent that organised
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 during nowadays
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competitive
 world, it is
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 decision of each individual to reach the goal or not by the self-discipline.
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hectic
 schedule, workplace, home and other
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peace
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peaces
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places
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 of their
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lives
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, because they cannot think with cold mind
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 everything will be not on
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 place. Other
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 of
people
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 do not care about
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, they think a lot about everything and their mind is
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similar
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people
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successful
? To conclude, clean and organised space has
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 impact on one group of
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 when another part of
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 that it is not a vital necessity. As far as I am concerned that
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 organizational point is on the
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equal
 level of essential needs for humanity.
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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • organised
  • clutter-free
  • productivity
  • mental clarity
  • efficiency
  • professionalism
  • first impressions
  • ergonomics
  • aesthetically pleasing
  • compulsive neatness
  • functional space
  • minimising distractions
  • systematic arrangement
  • time management
  • work-life balance
  • streamline
  • feng shui
  • optimal performance
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