Large businesses have big budgets for marketing and promotion and as a result, people gravitate towards buying their products. What problems does this cause? What could be done to encourage people to buy local products?

Large companies provide a great amount of money for their advertising campaigns;
therefore
people are more interested to buy their products.
This
essay will suggest that the biggest
problems
caused by
this
phenomenon are the monopolization of
market
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and the increasing number of bankrupted small
businesses
and
then
argue that anti-monopolization laws and financial help from the government are the most efficient solutions. The most important
problems
caused by people’s attention to large
businesses
, because of great advertisement are that these companies become monopolists in their sphere and reduction in
number
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a number
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of private
entrepreneurships
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entrepreneurship
. Large
businesses
just do not have a competitor with the same budgets and grab more and more parts of the
market
, providing a range of services that others cannot afford.
Furthermore
, millions of self-employed lose their income, because less number of people wants to buy unpopular products, so small
businesses
are disappearing. If Domino’s pizza or McDonald’s open
new
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café in
new
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city, it automatically
increase
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public’s
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the public’s
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interest
to
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them;
therefore
uncompetitive restaurants will be closed in a few months or years. Possible solutions to these
problems
would be tough anti-monopolist reforms and subsidies or low taxes for
self-employed
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the self-employed
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. If
government
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the government
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controls the work of markets and make restrictions where needed,
market
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the market
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will not be in a hand of one company and
competition
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rates will be high.
Moreover
, subsidies could be a pill to those, which do not have the same instruments for advertisement.
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, in the majority of European countries taxes are paid by the income of the company, to level
off
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of
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competition rates. To conclude, monopolization of the
market
and increased bankrupting rates among small
businesses
are the major
problems
, but possible solutions could be to control companies and to help
for
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small
entrepreneurships
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entrepreneurship
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • over-reliance
  • disrupts
  • entrepreneurship
  • economic diversity
  • monopolistic
  • financial power
  • homogenization
  • awareness campaigns
  • tax incentives
  • sustainability
  • artisan
  • eco-friendly
  • dominate
  • innovation
  • stifle
  • richness
  • cultures
  • traditions
  • highlighting
  • distinguish
  • superior
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