Because many children are not able to learn foreign languages, schools should not force them to learn foreign languages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Most of the educational institutes these days have provided
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an opportunity
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for the pupils to get to know different languages apart from their native
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. To which, few people
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that children should not be forced to learn
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language
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. I totally oppose
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and would rather support the schools
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takes
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initiatives. I would give my reasoning to my statement in the following paragraphs.
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, learning new languages makes the children aware
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the presence of different cultural
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.
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, it
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enables
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build up
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lingusitic
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linguistic
skills which in turn helps them to survive wherever they go.
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,
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is a
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is widely accepted and understood throughout the world, the only reason why
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being made mandatory in most
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the
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schools.
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,
Students
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who take up to learn
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the extra
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have found to
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competent enough as compared to their counterparts.
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conducted on intelligence level by UCOL university found that students with
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of two
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language
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had IQ
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greater than their component who knew just their native
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.
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, It
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helps in welcoming and getting to know about the presence of different countries and their traditional beliefs amongst the pupils. Though it should not be mandatory be schools to learn a foreign
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but
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still options should be made available.
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as
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availability of french,
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, german or
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Spanish
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language
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to take on during summer.
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but not the least, by being aware of different
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, a person can beat the competition to survive in
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world.
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, to conclude it can be said that sectors who
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the responsibility of building up knowledge should inject the availability of different prospect for the children
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so that they can soar high in their life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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