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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #levels #education #schools #universities #time #facts #skills
Many individuals believe that we spend a
lot
 of life-
time
 on
whole
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education
 process, which is started from schools to colleges and universities, as well as
this
 learning approach doesn't have sufficient practical things to use in real life. Now I will explain my
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opinion
why
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 a
lot
 of
time
 is spent on studying facts rather than real competencies.
Firstly
, I want to talk about why I agree
with
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that academic studies should take a
lot
 of our
time
.
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Then
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 why is that studying is continuous progress to gain
knowlegde
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knowledge
 by small steps in my opinion, and we might pass these all learning processes in order to achieve an academic degree.
Also
, many kinds of jobs insist a professional degree
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job
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a job
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 candidate. If you want to get
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work with good condition and
prospect
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, you have to gain academic
education
 and invest in your knowledge by your
time
.
Secondly
, all
education
 establishments give
knowledges
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knowledge
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 to understand us by step by step. It is a reason we can't skip primary schools where teach
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a fundamental
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lesson
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lessons
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.
Furthermore
,
unversities
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universities
 and colleges have requirements
what
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for what
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 educational level you have
such
 as you do have
appropiriate
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appropriate
knowlegdes
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knowledge
 to deep dive into scientific subjects, and all fundamental findings have been done. But too
theorotical
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theoretical
education
 might have a few drawbacks,
for
instance
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 students don't know how to use their
knowlegdes
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knowledge
 in
real
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case
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. To sum up, I fully stand the side of that we should spend a
lot
 of
time
 on learning
,
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 because it is needed to our future job career and prospect. And, we should pass all educational phases in order to get a professional degree and gain some
scienfic
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scientific
education
. I believe that high
education
 can lead to developments and innovations
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rote memorization
  • practical skills
  • adaptable skills
  • critical thinking
  • balanced approach
  • problem-solving
  • decision-making
  • workforce readiness
  • real-life challenges
  • technological advancements
  • information management
  • creativity hindrance
  • lifelong learning
  • skill development
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