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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many individuals believe that we spend a
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 of life-
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education
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 process, which is started from schools to colleges and universities, as well as
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 learning approach doesn't have sufficient practical things to use in real life. Now I will explain my
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opinion
why
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 a
lot
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 of
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 is spent on studying facts rather than real competencies.
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, I want to talk about why I agree
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that academic studies should take a
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 of our
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 why is that studying is continuous progress to gain
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knowledge
 by small steps in my opinion, and we might pass these all learning processes in order to achieve an academic degree.
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, many kinds of jobs insist a professional degree
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job
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a job
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 candidate. If you want to get
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work with good condition and
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, you have to gain academic
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 and invest in your knowledge by your
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, all
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 establishments give
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knowledge
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 to understand us by step by step. It is a reason we can't skip primary schools where teach
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a fundamental
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lesson
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lessons
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.
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,
unversities
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universities
 and colleges have requirements
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for what
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 educational level you have
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 as you do have
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appropriate
knowlegdes
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knowledge
 to deep dive into scientific subjects, and all fundamental findings have been done. But too
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theoretical
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 might have a few drawbacks,
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 students don't know how to use their
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knowledge
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. To sum up, I fully stand the side of that we should spend a
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 of
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 because it is needed to our future job career and prospect. And, we should pass all educational phases in order to get a professional degree and gain some
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scientific
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. I believe that high
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 can lead to developments and innovations
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rote memorization
  • practical skills
  • adaptable skills
  • critical thinking
  • balanced approach
  • problem-solving
  • decision-making
  • workforce readiness
  • real-life challenges
  • technological advancements
  • information management
  • creativity hindrance
  • lifelong learning
  • skill development
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