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The diagrams below show UK students' responses to the question of to what extent would they describe themselves as financially organised. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show UK students' responses to the question of to what extent would they describe themselves as financially organised. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Two of the diagrams above show UK
students
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' responses
of
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 how financially organised they describe themselves. More than two-thirds of the respondents, 76% to be exact, believe they are either fairly organized or very organized. The table shows the information
that is
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 highlighted here, and
that is
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 the
students
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 that answered very organized, which is 21% of all respondents. There are three categories in the table, '
age
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 up to 22
years
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,' '
age
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 23-25
years
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,' and '
age
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 over 26
years
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.' The first category shows that
students
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 with
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age
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ages
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 up to 22
years
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 take up 18% of the total
students
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 that describe themselves as very organized. The
second
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 category shows that
students
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 with
age
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 23-25
years
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 are 26% of the total
students
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 that responded
with
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as
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 very organized.
Lastly
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, the
third
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 category shows that 35% of the
students
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 that answered with very organized are
students
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 with
age
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 over 26
years
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.
This
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 research shows that the ability to organize financial matters increases
along with
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age
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.
In
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 the findings, we can conclude that UK
students
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' are quite financially organized.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, age, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "describe" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 6 times.
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