Traffic abd housing problems in major cities could be solved by moving large companies and factories andtheir employees to the country side. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Traffic
, as well as accommodation problems, is the most common problem, especially in major cities.
Thus
, the government's management is
necessaly
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necessary
things to do. Some people believe that moving huge industries and thair workforces to
countryside
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will decrease these issues. In the following paragraphs, the reasons to support my agreement will be discussed in detail.
To begin
with, I strongly believe that every town has a limitation of population.
Therefore
,
overpopulation
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issue is founded in many large cities should be solved by decreasing the population. The declination of people cause lower housing's demand, so the price of accommodation falls
accordingly
which is the more affordable price. People is to have more space for living
such
as living area, workspace, exercising area and library due to the ratio of the individual's space is increased by decreasing divisor.
For example
, in Thailand, many large industries are moved to Prachinburi which is larger land and less cost of living than Bangkok recently.
Additionally
, lower using vehicle could solve the
traffic
issues which are combined with the accident,
traffic
jam and broken road. Especially, in large
cities
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many workforces usually use
personal
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the personal
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car
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cars
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to go to their factories.
This
maylead
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may lead
to heavy
traffic
jam
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jams
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or
terrible
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a terrible
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accident
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accidents
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sometimes.
Moreover
, all-time
resorce
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resource
record
transportations that always use heavy lorries can drop the road's lifetime. In Bangkok Thailand, it has the same problems and
also
includes inadequate road
problem
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problems
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,
hence
the government declares the policy for motivating about displacing to another less town as Ratchaburi. In summary, Decreasing the
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overpopulation
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over population
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overpopulation
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by displacing the large factories and their labours can solve the housing and
traffic
issues and is to make life better in future.
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