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Global warming is one of the biggest threat to our environment. What causes global warming? What solution are there to this problem ?

#threat #environment
In today’s
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 the rising Earth’s
temperature
 is a major cause of concern for our ecosystem. The main cause of
this
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this
 problematic situation are increasing pollution level and deforestation.
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 to overcome the problem. One of the prime reasons for
this
 precarious state is the increase in
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 of bad quality air.
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 recent times due to
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 in industrialization, the rise in
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 of vehicles on road is contributing towards
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 the
temperature
 of
air
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 in our ecosystem. Recently a survey conducted by WHO stated that in the past ten years the percentage of pollution caused due to
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 of fossil fuels has increased by thirty percentage worldwide and which
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 to our society. Another
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 factor leading to
this
 questionable state of affairs is the large number of forests getting destroyed. With
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 demand for infrastructure and
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land
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 for farming large amounts of trees are slashed off which lowers
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 of oxygen in the atmosphere leading to
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temperature
 of the earth. In order to deal with
this
 uncertain condition, the following recommendation should be considered. To tackle the problem caused by vehicles
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 emit harmful gases the government should promote the use of electric vehicles as they have
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emission
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.
Moreover
, heavy industries should be under strict control
weather
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 they are using proper methods to dispose of industrial waste which
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 pollution.
Further
, to tackle the issue of deforestation citizens should organize tree plantation drives
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 would improve the quality of air and reduce the
temperature
 of the burning Earth. To conclude, if the
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 measures are seriously implemented the problem of global warming will certainly be reduced.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global warming
  • environmental degradation
  • climate change
  • greenhouse effect
  • carbon dioxide
  • methane
  • emissions
  • fossil fuels
  • deforestation
  • industrialization
  • livestock farming
  • population growth
  • waste management
  • volcanic eruptions
  • polar ice caps
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