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Do you believe that experimentation on animals for scientific purposes is justified. Are there any alternatives to animal experiments?

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The generation of safety data is fundamental for the development of new medicines and vaccines. Before testing the new medicine or vaccine, it is a global standard established by many regulatory authorities that tests with
animals
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 should be conducted to understand the safety profile of the medicine, which are named pre-clinical tests. The pre-clinical tests with
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 of different sizes, varying between rodents and
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primates
 are important to study the
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behavior
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 within the complex physiological system called
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 vivo" experiment. There are researches that try to mimic
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 interaction using experiments called "in vitro", in which human cells or human tissues are exposed to different
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 concentrations to assess
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 safety profiles.
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, there is a significant risk to miss important interactions resulted from
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 metabolic
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 only possible to identify using complex physiological systems. In the 1950s, it was found that a lot of babies were born without arms and legs due to the use of medicine for nausea during their intrauterine development. It would be avoided if pre-clinical research with pregnant mice were conducted before launching it on the market for pregnant women to use. Never mind, alternatives for animal experimentation should be continuously developed in order to decrease as much as possible the use of
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 in preclinical studies. Until new technologies and methods are developed, it is important to keep all efforts on the conduction of preclinical research with a focus on
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' well being before, during, and after the experiments, that's why
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 area is
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 well regulated by authority agencies around the world.
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