I would like to introduce myself as Raj Navinkumar Patel hereby sincerely state the following purpose of pursuing my studies in United Kingdom. I am

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United
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Kingdom. I am an ambitious and enthusiastic person and want to provide myself
the
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best
education
. I have enrolled myself for the
course
of ….. I have acquired my S.S.C
education
With 84.66 % from Gujarat Secondary
Education
Board in the year 2014 and I had done completed my HSC with
94.36
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Percentile Rank from Gujarat Secondary Higher
Education
Board in the year
of
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2016. After
that
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,that

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I had done my Bachelor of Technology(B.Tech.) in Mechanical Engineering From
institute
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of infrastructure Technology Research And Management (IITRAM) in the year
of
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2021. I had participated
a
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plethora of extracurricular activities
such
as debate
competition
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competitions

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, taking seminars and robotics
competition
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competitions

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. These gave me opportunities to execute my
knowledge
. So, by taking
….
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a…. course
the…. course

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course
in mechanical engineering from your esteemed institution, I wish to enter a
world
of complete
knowledge
regarding the …. .I strongly opine that the
course
that your institution is offering in the field of mechanical engineering fits directly into my career map. I came to
this
conclusion after a thorough investigation of the courses and subjects that you are offering as a part of
this
course
. I was specifically drawn towards the section on …
course
details…. , it convinced me
to
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the fact that
this
is exactly the
course
that I wish to pursue. What added to
this
is the fact that your
university
is deemed to be the best in the field of engineering as it merges in its curriculum both the theoretical and practical aspects
the
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course
. As
this
program
designed
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with a specific focus of ….. By doing
this
course
I'll enrich my
knowledge
manage strategically both a business and teams within the workplace.
This
will help in many areas of life and for my professional career too. I will get an opportunity to work
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as
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managerial position or Senior Executive. I have chosen The
University
of ….
for
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to

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pursue my masters. It is a leading modern
university
with a strong reputation for teaching and research.
University
has achieved national and international recognition for the excellence of their teaching, research and innovation. Their main aim is to support
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the student
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student
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students

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by advising and offering a range of professional services. Their employability graph shows that most of
graduates
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the graduates

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have got
job
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the job
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after complete their graduation. They provide a plethora of facilities
such
as library support and academic skills
service
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. It
also
provides Internship opportunities to
their
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students
. U NAME….. has a specific team within Student Services dedicated to supporting international
students
. Here
so
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are so

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many benefits to
study
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studying

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in
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at

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University
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of …………. One of the main reasons to choose
UK
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as my preferred country for
further
study is that the degrees and qualifications from
UK
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are known around the
world
as high quality and
world class
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. It is
world's
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leading destination for international
students
.
UK
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allows me to pursue vocational courses along with my main
course
.
UK
campus represents multi-cultural diversity. Where
students
like me would benefit in terms of learning new cultures and traditions. Most
of
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International
Students
believe that
UK
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degree is worth their financial investment for their graduation or
further
study.
UK
university
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have decades of experience in working with international
students
. I want to pursue
this
course
to reach my goals. My main aim in the near future would be to have a complete and
in depth
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in-depth

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knowledge
of wealth creation and wealth multiplication. I would like to contribute my might in the area of wealth creation and want to develop
such
skills as may be required for decision making in a senior managerial capacity. I end my statement by looking forward to a positive response from you, which will help me reach my goals. I am fully aware of the fact that pursuing
this
course
requires a high level of intelligence, dedication and immense sacrifice. I am confident that I have the capability to contribute positively towards your esteemed
University
and with great hope, I eagerly wait for your benevolent act of accepting me into your fold and granting me
an
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admission in my desired
course
. Thank you for giving me an opportunity to express my thought to you. Best Regards, Raj Patel
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