In many countries today, there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation, and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it?

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Nowadays, we are witnessing a severe defect in connection between universities and the labour market worldwide.
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issue has made numerous highly graduate people unemployed.
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essay will examine the reasons for
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problem and
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suggest some practical actions as a solution in favour of eradicating it forever. At
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, we can see it growing worse every day by taking a close look at
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not a new thing, and we have been facing it since the middle of the 20th century. As a culprit, society is in the position of the prime suspect.
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, society has made people believe that going to college is the only way to be successful after high school. In some countries,
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toxic assumption goes
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and has convinced the public thought that they should judge human worth based on the educational degree. So what actions must be taken as initial steps for solving
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situation? As community members, we can begin altering values from obsolete ones to new ones.
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, if you should determine who is qualified to take a loan, consider the same criteria for candidates, whether they are a surgeon or a blacksmith.
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, the government's role cannot be underestimated as well. Despite all civil rights, which must be equal, official organizations have to send
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message to all citizens, especially young ones, that no one is not superior because of the profession. All in all, many well-skilled students have various obstacles on the way to employment, approximately everywhere in the world. I believe it can be solved easily if people and governments cope together and diagnose our beliefs about success.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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