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A Government has a responsibility to its citizens to ensure their safety. Therefore, some people think that the government should increase spending on defense but spend less on social benefits. To what extend do you agree?

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The layouts of accommodations in a library have been demonstrated by the infographic representations. Overall, it is clearly visible that the picturesque representations have displayed distinct transformations of several aspects in the 2000 layout as compared to the recent plan. Earlier, the site was consists of a main entrance on the left and
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 to that there was a section for travelling related books. The northeast corner had fiction; where, exactly the opposite part was having the non-fiction genre. The service desk was located in the extreme southwest direction and on top of it, new books were stored. Study materials associated with art, cooking and hobbies had been placed
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 to the fiction rack. According to the current blueprint, in the northern direction, four different shelves have been introduced for several fields like art, hobbies, cookery and fiction. The non-fiction paperbacks have relocated in the northeasterly section; while, a cafe can be seen in its early location. The entrance, along with the service desk, travel and new books have remained consistent. There is an arrangement for a sitting area, almost in the middle of the map and opposite the café with three round tables and several chairs.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • national security
  • sovereignty
  • foreign entities
  • military sector
  • economic growth
  • inequality
  • vulnerable populations
  • elderly
  • disabled
  • unemployed
  • social stability
  • public health
  • balanced approach
  • appropriate funding
  • nation’s needs
  • priorities
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