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Some people consider price as the most impirtant thing to think about when buying products (such as cellphnes) or services (medical treatment) do you agree of disagree?

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Some people think that fee is the majority significant thing when purchasing goods (
such
 as mobile phones) or (medical care). In my opinion, I agree that
price
 is most advantageous , but I do
also
 believe that
quality
 of
products
 does
also
 most important. On the one hand, the
price
 is a significant thing when someone thinks to buy important devices due to a number of reasons.
Firstly
,
price
 gives customers an idea about the
products
 ,
for instance
, iPhone cost expensive because iPhone has high characteristics.
Moreover
,
price
 is important for people who get a low salary so they can take the goods with little cost and by ,that they can buy anything, they need.
On the other hand
, the
quality
 of the
products
 is
also
 significant because of many reasons.
First
, some items with low payment have a worse
quality
 that no one can use the
products
 for a long time.
For example
, an electronic brush cost cheap, the client will use them only for short time.
Furthermore
, some
products
 will be unsafe because of low prices with bad
quality
.
For instance
, some medical treatments are unsafe due to the
quality
 of
products
 is low. In conclusion, the fee is most significant because it determines the condition of the device.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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