Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement?

Hereby I would like to express my interest in applying for the Postgraduate Programmes Renewable
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Universidade de Fortaleza in 2016 and I have
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concluded a Master of Business Administration in Project Management in 2019, which has pleasantly surprised me with wide lessons and good practices that can be applied. During my professional journey, I have always pursued to achieve higher levels and stand out in the competitive job market. In order to enrich my curriculum, I count on several courses and certifications,
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as Black Belt Lean Six Sigma, 6 Sigma for Design and APQP4Wind. My
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when I started to work at Aeris
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as an intern and worked my way until
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engineer position. Aeris is a wind blade manufacturer with more than 5000 employees and has produced thousands of blades worldwide for important players in
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market,
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requirements and to ensure they would be met, by analyzing the impacts and planning the implementation along with other teams. The renewable
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part of its history and presents a lot of space for research, studies and improvements. There is still a huge journey toward a sustainable world, especially
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of investments. I am looking for an opportunity abroad to learn from a reference institution and country being able to give my contribution to the
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that, PPRE was highly recommended by previous work colleagues who attended the master at Oldenburg University and encouraged me to apply. I cherish to have international experiences and learn new languages. I have lived in Germany for 1 and a half years as a scholarship holder from the Brazilian Government and DAAD in 2014 and I was part of
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School program in the USA in 2008.
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, I speak Portuguese and English fluently, and Intermediate level of German and Spanish. Those experiences abroad enlightened me to respect and admire the world’s differences and cultures. I consider myself self-motivated, adaptable and a goal-oriented person, I am
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comfort zone. The opportunity to be part of the SuRE program would be life-changing to my professional and academic career. I would be
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to represent my nation, gender and class by being fully engaged and committed to the results and success of the project.
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  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • pollutants
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