Some people belive that it is best to acpect a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of maney. Other argue that it is better to try and improve such a situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is true that some people think it is the best way to understand the hung
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or stay in a bad position.
On the contrary
, if we are in that position, we have to try our best and improve.
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, it is better when people who have stress
situation
then
they stay with it and release the problems.
First
of all that they have to accept the
situation
.
Then
it
easy
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to solve
this
and improve it.
In contrast
, if they understand it but stay with the
problem
, Everything will not be better and that people have to stay in that
situation
continues. f If you now turn to
second
argue that it is good to
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. In my
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to improve
such
a situative, It
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to understand.You will know what
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and what is the cause of the
problem
. It
easy
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to improve the point of it.
Therefore
trying best in your bad
situation
makes your
situation
advance. Example A group of
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who
have
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the mistake in
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research
, they didn't give up to his job. He
try
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to solve the
problem
in
this
. Now, from his work we have
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antiseptic to
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Finally
, I feel
that is
most likely that
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good to
immprove
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improve
your bad
situation
because it
it
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makes your another
situation
better. Taking in both views, the
first
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your best is understanding it.
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