In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

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we believe that they should do the unpaid
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.
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people to encourage their skills and discipline.
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, helping old people can make them understand life
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also
get to respect old people as well.
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the other hand, it can affect negatively
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them because the unpaid
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it can change their attitude to
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life in
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bad
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soon. In conclusion, having
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teenager
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to
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do unpaid community
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widely and considering the character of that child.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Ecological benefits
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Carbon sequestration
  • Sustainable development
  • Eco-friendly building materials
  • Green architecture
  • Government policies
  • Urban sprawl
  • Infrastructure
  • Smart planning
  • Agricultural lands
  • Rural areas
  • Population growth
  • Environmental sensitivity
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