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Some people think that developed countries have a higher responsibility to combat climate change than developing countries. Other believe that all countries should have the same responsibility towards protecting the environment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is undeniable that the
world
 at the present time has had changed into modern society, and the
world
 is facing a global warming issue, nowadays, resulting in some persons think that improved
countries
 around the
world
 play a dramatic role
on
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 solving these issues rather than unimproved
countries
, while others claim that the best way for protecting the environment is the cooperation together of all
countries
. From my point of view, I think that human activities of all
countries
 are the main cause of
this
 problem. In the following paragraph, the reasons to support my opinion will be outlined in the detail. It is true to say that
people
 who
located
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 in developed areas are often some habits which can make negative impacts on the environment rather than
people
 who stay in developing areas because they are often dramatically using many resources in many ways,
such
 as the power production and the construction of
building
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.
Furthermore
, many pollutions are created by developed
countries
,
for example
, the number of private car use in the USA is increasing every year,
as a result
, many pollutions are caused from individual car rising which is the main factor of climate
change
.
However
, solving climate
change
 of the globe not only depends on developed lands but
also
 on developing lands as well because persons in improved lands can create some pollutions as well,
for instance
,
people
 in Thailand often use plastic products which are the main factor of global warming.
Additionally
, some careers, like farmers, in developing regions can make drawbacks for the environment
due to
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sometimes they are cutting down many trees, resulting in they should play an important role
on
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 environmental
problem solving
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. In conclusion, I believe that the best way of climate
change
 solving is
the
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cooperation between improved regions and improving regions because all
countries
 around the
world
 are the main cause of causing these issues.
Therefore
, it is recommended that
people
 in each land should
change
 some activities that can make harmful to the natural community.
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