Nowadays parents put too much pressure on their children to succeed. What is the reason for doing this? Is this a negative or positive development?
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children
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have too Use synonyms
much
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This
will lead to negative consequences, Linking Words
as a result
of the Linking Words
children
become overwhelmed by competing with their peers.
It is argued that the Use synonyms
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robbatic
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acrobatic
robotic
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the
colleagues. In order to obtain good grades for the school exams, many youngers opt for Correct article usage
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spoon feeding
with getting much guidance with their tuition masters. Add a hyphen
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For example
, in India, a lot of students in primary school give up some optional subjects due to the Linking Words
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study workload. From my point of view, the pupils should have Correct your spelling
hectic
fewer
time to do their leisure time activities to get their Correct quantifier usage
less
mind
relaxed.
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minds
On the other hand
, young people get more stressed being competing with their fellow students. In order to obtain Linking Words
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higher results, the Correct article usage
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children
solely depend on their teachers, make them less Use synonyms
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and selfish. Correct your spelling
independent
For instance
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suffer from anxiety and depression due to Change to a plural noun
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fed
up with the complex and wide variety of educational Add a missing verb
being fed
institution's
syllabus. I believe that there is a huge possibility that the students would not be able to reach their future goals due to their families unbearable pressure.
In conclusion, the behaviour of Fix the agreement mistake
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children
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite