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Some people believe that video games are beneficial to children whereas others believe that it has negative effects.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It might be considered by some
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 that playing
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games
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children
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, Other
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 think that
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games
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affects
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children
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 in a negative way. In my opinion,
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 consider that these activities have a significant positive effect on
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's development. On the one hand, it is frequently thought that
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games
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 have a lot of advantages for
children
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 and I agree. In
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 few years of life,
children
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's brains are undergoing certain crucial developmental phases, and playing
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games
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 during these years aids
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young
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 to develop fine motor skills more appropriately.
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, it enhances their chances of better development of hand-eye coordination skills, which, in later life can help them build a successful career by becoming a great
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 surgeon, a well-trained engineer or a fine artist.
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, some
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 might not support the idea of indulging the younger
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 in
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 activities because of the fear of wastage of time and resources. In their view, they consider
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 gaming as an unhealthy and unconstructive way of spending time and money. According to them, there can be better ways to utilise the valuable time of their
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,
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 playing outdoor
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 or letting them play indoor
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 with their siblings etc,
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 trying to stop the use of
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games
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 in their homes. In conclusion, while
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 have
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point
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 of
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,
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 consider that it is very crucial for
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children
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 to play
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video
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games
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 because it enhances their brain's ability to learn fine motor skills, and
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, allowing them to have better career options in future.
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