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Some people think charity organization should help people in great need wherever they live. However, others think they should help people in their own country. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.

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There are some discussions about whether the
charity
 corporation should only focus on the domestic or should benefit
on
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all
people
 wherever they live. From my standpoint, I reckon that the
charity
organisation
 should help persons no
matter
 where they live. The
mercy
 operation should help individuals in great need no
matter
 where they are. To be specific, some developing
countries
 are more needing help from
charity
 organisations than
the
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developed
countries
.
For example
, many
of
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doctors who come from other
countries
 went to
the
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Africa to help the
local
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locals
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, to heal their disease, due to the lack of medical
condition
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conditions
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 in the local. So the
resident
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residents
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 need aid from the other
countries
charity
organisation
,
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 and the
mercy
 operation should help
people
 no
matter
 where they live.
Besides
,
people
 who need help are impartible, and can not be differentiated by their national background. Human is a whole in the planet, no
matter
 their distinctions in races, faiths, education or property. The key goal of the
charity
 is to benefit
for
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the human, not a single country,
therefore
 the
mercy
organisation
 are responsible to other
countries
’ citizens too. So the
charity
 should help
people
 in
the
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great need wherever they are.
On the other hand
, There
also
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 has some reasons that the
charity
organisation
 should help
people
 in their own country. Because the
mercy
 operation
understand
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 their own national conditions,
hence
 they are adapted to local conditions for assistance, to provide appropriate aid in their motherland, so their aid will be better than others. In conclusion, helping
people
 who from domestic or foreign
countries
 are both have positive or negative aspects. Whereas I still believe that the
charity
 corporation should help
people
 no
matter
 where they live. Because all lives are worth living, and the
charity
 corporation
are
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 able to
makes
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 the mission successfully.
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