Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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time , some people prefer to have their own business more than having a job . It is
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because
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to restrict with a work.
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, if
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people
lose their self business ,they will lose everything. In
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without any
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who
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unless they have a book store which he
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on it.
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, businessmen who reliance wholly on their
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they
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struggle if they lose everything in one day. At the same time , it will be hard to stand again and facing the challenges.
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, my friend establish a car exhibit
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it
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by flooding. He face
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that he did not expect it will happen , so he lose the cars because his money is not fix the
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destroyed
cars. In conclusion ,
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people
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selves and
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the lack of
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opportunities
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job
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the results that will occur if they forfeit.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • company
  • organization
  • freedom
  • independence
  • income potential
  • flexibility
  • working hours
  • working location
  • passions
  • interests
  • decision-making
  • business practices
  • disadvantages
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