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Some people think that paper money and coins will be replaced completely by credit cards and online method of payments in the near future. Do you agree or disagree with their statement?

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The bar chart indicates
students
 charge including
accomodation
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accommodation
, food, bills and other essential payments in 1996 and 1999 in
United
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 Kingdom. It is clear that
entertainment
 had the majority of the
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expenses
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expences
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expenses
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 in both years.
On the other
hand
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children
's cost and all
type
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types
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 of
traveling
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 had the minimum role in
students
 fees. In 1996,
entertainment
 includes over 25% of the cost while, accommodation had less than 25% and unlike
entertainment
, accommodation saw a slight decline about 5% in 1999,
however
,
entertainment
 increase couple of
persentage
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percentage
 by
the
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1999 had over 30% of
students
 charge. Another important
expences
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 was food, bills and household goods, in 1996 consist 20% of all the costs but, in 1999, saw a slight
decrese
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decrease
 and include less than 20%. Other topics had
negligible
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 role in student cost in both years
for
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 example,
essebtial
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essential
 or nonessential travels had a total 10
percent
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per cent
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 of all expense in 1996 even though, essential
traveling
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travelling
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 growth
approximetaly
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approximately
 5% in 1999. one of the unique
topic
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 was having
a
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children
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children
 in 1996,
small
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 percentage of
students
 had
children
's
expense
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expenses
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 which was about 1%
however
, in 1999,
there
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was
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wase
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was
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n;t any
children
's expense for
students
.
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