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CCTV cameras are a common sight in town centres, on public transport and outside many businesses. They not only help identify and apprehend criminals but also serve as a crime deterrent. however, some people believe that they are intrusive and constitute a breach of privacy. what is more important, personal privacy or public safety?

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 important, personal privacy or public safety?
Society
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 never been far from criminal. Where stronger rules, life principles always will somebody who
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 not respect
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 rules makes something out of them. And CCTV cameras
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 one of the methods that can help us have order in our
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. But some people considered
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that is
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 of personal privacy.
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 need to underline , that
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 absolutely disagree with
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onlyin
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only in
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 our planet, world.
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 every crime person will have
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 with
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. So it helps not only identify
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 but
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 in crime will
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. All of us di knows what should happen if
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wrong
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 step. So
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 for
outhers
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others
. In conclusion, every person needed to keep in mind that every bad does will have
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 punishment.
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 order without chaos, we just trying to minimize it to live without being terrified for our
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 and own safety.
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