PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT VIOLENCE ON TELEVISION AND IN COMPUTER GAMES HAS A DAMAGING EFFECT ON SOCIETY.OTHERS DENY THAT THESE FACTORS HAVE NO SIGNIFICANT INFLUENCE ON PEOPLE’S BEHAVIOUR.WHAT IS YOUR OPINION?
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