PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT VIOLENCE ON TELEVISION AND IN COMPUTER GAMES HAS A DAMAGING EFFECT ON SOCIETY.OTHERS DENY THAT THESE FACTORS HAVE NO SIGNIFICANT INFLUENCE ON PEOPLE’S BEHAVIOUR.WHAT IS YOUR OPINION?

It has been observed that
television
and
computer
games
can lead to harmful
effect
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effects
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on generation these
days
.Some
people
believe that watching crime
content
on
television
and playing brutality
games
on
computer
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can lead to violence, while
other
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others
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refute the notion.
Moreover
,
this
can be due to several
reason
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reasons
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ranging from the
content
of movies and serials to the influence of video
games
.From my personal standpoint,I believe
television
and
computer
games
these
days
create
negative
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a negative
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effect
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effects
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on
community
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the community
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. To paraphrase, fighting and racism movies and serials can cause violence which has a bad
effect
on
public
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the public
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. Analytically,
people
get so much influenced by digital
content
these
days
.
Moreover
,They think outside the box, without analyzing the
result
and start copying their role model in real life which cause them great loss in future, as well as it has
bad
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a bad
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impact on
people
also
.
Such
as,
people
after watching
joker
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the joker
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movie got influenced by the character which
as a
result
they start killing
people
which shows their aggression towards
people
which
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whom
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they don’t like.
Secondly
,
games
which have fighting or killing
content
are very harmful
for
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to
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society
.
On the other hand
, kids these
days
spend most of their time
in
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playing
games
on
computer
or mobile which not only drain their energy but
also
affect their study.Eventually,some
games
have
chatting
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option
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options
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,so while playing they use
wrong
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the wrong
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slang and vulgar language which is not good for their generation,
as a
result
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,result
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their behaviour shows cruelty and aggressiveness towards
society
.
For
example
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Kids got so much influenced by playing PUB G
games
that they lost their senses and start killing themself,which
as a
result
Government has banned these types of
games
from many countries. In conclusion, violence is always harmful
for
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society
whether it can be because of
television
or
games
.In my opinion,violent
content
on
television
and
games
must be banned and penalised,which has a damaging
effect
on the community.correspondingly,movie and
games
creator
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creators
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take initiative in making good
content
which
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that
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can develop more love and kindness towards
society
.
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