PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT VIOLENCE ON TELEVISION AND IN COMPUTER GAMES HAS A DAMAGING EFFECT ON SOCIETY.OTHERS DENY THAT THESE FACTORS HAVE NO SIGNIFICANT INFLUENCE ON PEOPLE’S BEHAVIOUR.WHAT IS YOUR OPINION?
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It has been observed that
television
and computer
games
can lead to harmful effect
on generation these Fix the agreement mistake
effects
days
.Some people
believe that watching crime content
on television
and playing brutality games
on computer
can lead to violence, while Add an article
the computer
a computer
other
refute the notion.Correct pronoun usage
others
Moreover
,this
can be due to several reason
ranging from the Change to a plural noun
reasons
content
of movies and serials to the influence of video games
.From my personal standpoint,I believe television
and computer
games
these days
create negative
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a negative
effect
on Fix the agreement mistake
effects
community
.
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the community
effect
on public
. Analytically,Add an article
the public
people
get so much influenced by digital content
these days
.Moreover
,They think outside the box,
without analyzing the result
and start copying their role model in real life which cause them great loss in future,
as well as it has bad
impact on Add an article
a bad
people
also
.Such
as,people
after watching joker
movie got influenced by the character which Correct article usage
the joker
as a
result
they start killing people
which shows their aggression towards people
which
they don’t like.
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whom
Secondly
,games
which have fighting or killing content
are very harmful for
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to
society
.On the other hand
, kids these days
spend most of their time in
playing Change preposition
apply
games
on computer
or mobile which not only drain their energy but also
affect their study.Eventually,some games
have chatting
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a chatting
option
,so while playing they use Fix the agreement mistake
options
wrong
slang and vulgar language which is not good for their generation,Correct article usage
the wrong
as a
result
their behaviour shows cruelty and aggressiveness towards Add the comma(s)
,result
society
.For
example
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,example
games
that they lost their senses and start killing themself,which as a
result
Government has banned these types of games
from many countries.
In conclusion, violence is always harmful for
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to
society
whether it can be because of television
or games
.In my opinion,violent content
on television
and games
must be banned and penalised,which has a damaging effect
on the community.correspondingly,movie and games
creator
take initiative in making good Fix the agreement mistake
creators
content
which
can develop more love and kindness towards Correct pronoun usage
that
society
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