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Do the dangerous derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweigh the advantages

#chemicals #food #production #preservation
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Nowadays, most of the people in the world are depending on processed
food
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 which contains a huge amount of
chemicals
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 . Even though
chemicals
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 can give some advantages , the potential dangers that can be received from
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 are greater than the advantages.
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, in the cities parents always tempt with processed
foods
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 as most of the
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 both of the parents are going to work and they do not have enough
time
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 to prepare the
food
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. The recent research, done by the World Health Organization, shows that more than 50% of the school children are bringing processed
foods
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 for their breakfast and it takes only a few minutes to prepare
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 kind of
food
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.
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,
chemicals
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,
such
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 as colourings, often used by
food
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 manufactures because
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 will give good looks to the
food
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 and most of the
time
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 these
foods
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last
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 for a longer period because of the
chemicals
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 it contains.
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, these ready-made
foods
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 contain lots of carbs and sugar and which provides a lot of disadvantages to health. Today, a lot of young people become more obese due to consuming these types of
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 additives
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this
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 will often lead to hyperactivity among children. Companies encourage people to buy their product by showing a lot of advertisements and even sometimes they show a number of researches which support their products but most of the
time
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 these researches are biased and they have connections with the researchers. The evidence clearly shows that companies are getting more advantages from the
chemicals
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 which they use for their products than the consumers. In the long ,term consumers are ended up with health issues by consuming
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 kind of product.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Health risks
  • Chemically treated
  • Allergies
  • Resistance to antibiotics
  • Environmental impact
  • Chemical runoff
  • Water pollution
  • Nutritional value
  • Crop yields
  • Shelf life
  • Pests and diseases
  • Regulatory bodies
  • Stricter regulations
  • Public health
  • Environmental integrity
  • Technological advancements
  • Safer alternatives
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