While your friend was away on vacation, you stayed in his apartment. While you were there, you dropped an expensive bowl and broke it. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter - explain what happened, - apologise for the accident, - tell your friend what you plan to do about the bowl.

#friend #vacation #apartment #bowl #apologise #accident #plan

Dear Jason, How are you and how

was

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were

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you

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your

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holiday? I hope you had an amazing vacation. Thanks for letting me stay over at your place while you were away. I enjoyed playing PS4 games and

also

had a great time swimming at the lap pool at your condominium indoor facility. I have unpleasant news for you actually. As I got tired of ordering food from neighbourhood food stores , I decided to try cooking by myself. I made a nice

bowl

of chicken

noodle

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However

, while I was pouring the boiling hot soup into a light blue colour

bowl

, it slipped out of my hands and broke

unfortunately

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. The

bowl

seems to be of an expensive type. I am so sorry to have broken it. I feel extremely bad as

this

accident happened during my stay at your house

although

it was totally unintentional. I vividly recalled how the broken

bowl

looked like and its size. I found a similar

foodware

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footwear

although

the colour is not exactly the same. I bought two of them and arranged

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delivery to your

homestep

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home step

. I hope

this

would make you feel a bit better. Please let me know how you like them after you have received them. Kind regards, Mike

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

208 words

6.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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