While your friend was away on vacation, you stayed in his apartment. While you were there, you dropped an expensive bowl and broke it. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter - explain what happened, - apologise for the accident, - tell your friend what you plan to do about the bowl.

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Dear Jason, How are you and how

was

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were

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you

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your

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holiday? I hope you had an amazing vacation. Thanks for letting me stay over at your place while you were away. I enjoyed playing PS4 games and

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Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

had a great time swimming at the lap pool at your condominium indoor facility. I have unpleasant news for you actually. As I got tired of ordering food from neighbourhood food stores , I decided to try cooking by myself. I made a nice

bowl

Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

of chicken

noodle

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noodles

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However

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, while I was pouring the boiling hot soup into a light blue colour

bowl

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, it slipped out of my hands and broke

unfortunately

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,unfortunately

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. The

bowl

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seems to be of an expensive type. I am so sorry to have broken it. I feel extremely bad as

this

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accident happened during my stay at your house

although

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it was totally unintentional. I vividly recalled how the broken

bowl

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looked like and its size. I found a similar

foodware

Correct your spelling

footwear

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although

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the colour is not exactly the same. I bought two of them and arranged

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apply

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delivery to your

homestep

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home step

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. I hope

this

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would make you feel a bit better. Please let me know how you like them after you have received them. Kind regards, Mike

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

208 words

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