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While your friend was away on vacation, you stayed in his apartment. While you were there, you dropped an expensive bowl and broke it. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, - explain what happened - apologise for the accident - tell your friend what you plan to do about the bowl

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The given maps illustrate how a waterfront
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 in Darwin was developed between 2009 and 2014. Overall, the most significant changes were seen in the central
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 of the town, where all of the industrial areas were demolished and redeveloped primarily for residential purposes. Meanwhile, most of the facilities surrounding the lake remained unchanged. In 2009, there were two industrial areas of different sizes separated by the footpath at the centre of the waterfront with only three residential blocks located in the larger industrial
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. By 2014, those industrial zones had disappeared completely. A new swimming pool was installed in the smaller
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. The larger industrial
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 was obliterated to make way for a large green space with a slew of trees while a university and three new blocks of residential buildings adjacent to three old ones were erected.
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, on the south-eastern coast of the town, a new harbour was built, which could be accessed from the main road through a new footpath running through the green
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. Regarding the remaining facilities, they experienced no change over the period. The school and convention, which were located along the road leading to the fishing
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, remained unaltered, as did the fishing
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 and the two nearby swimming pools.

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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