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While your friend was away on vacation, you stayed in his apartment. While you were there, you dropped an expensive bowl and broke it. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, - explain what happened - apologise for the accident - tell your friend what you plan to do about the bowl

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Dear Bea, How are you,hope your vacation
doing
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 well. I am very thankful to let me stay
to
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 your apartment
for
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a
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mean time
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meantime
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. It was a big help
while
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am
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 searching
my
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 new house and it
is
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 easy to pass by
to
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my
work place
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. I am writing
this
 letter to
informed
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you regarding
to
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your expensive
bowl
.
i
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 know that
bowl
 has sentimental value
of
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 you and it was your
favorite
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bowl
,plus your
grandmother
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 gift. To make my story short,I accidentally split on the floor
while
 holding your
bowl
 and luckily I cannot save that
bowl
 and it is having a slight crack on the side. I sincerely apologise for my
action
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 and for being clumsy.Now I do not know how to face
with
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you I am really timid that's why I write and inform you in advance. By the
,
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way I still fixed the
bowl
 and I kept it
to
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 your display box,
although
 you cannot use
this
 at least we can keep it.Do not worry I have already bought a new one
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for
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the
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 alternative even
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it
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was
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 not
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a
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similar and it is not
a
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 sentimental as the old one. Hoping for your forgiveness. And see you soon, I miss
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you.Enjoyed the single moment of your vacation. Regards, Shiela
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