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Many companies and other organizations require employees to wear a uniform. For which jobs do you think a uniform is a good thing? What are the disadvantages of having to wear a uniform at work?

Over the recent years, the trend of wearing
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uniform
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uniforms
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 at
workplace
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 has declined;
still
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 there are a few establishments
which
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that
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 mandate the use of them. I believe, uniforms are more suitable for
those kind
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that kind
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 of jobs where
field work
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 is not involved because similar dressing helps in identifying their belonging. There a
a
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few downsides to
this
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 as well which we shall discuss below with relevant examples.
To begin
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 with, common clothing demotes bringing out an
individuals
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 real personality or true self. People used to wear uniforms during the industrial revolution when they worked in manufacturing units and plants. Nowadays, due to the economic shift towards
service
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the service
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 industry; the in-demand jobs are those where client servicing and customer interaction holds more importance. It becomes very difficult for the customers' to remember or differentiate a person from another due to similar
clothings
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clothing
items of clothing
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,
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 it is best to avoid
the
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confusion.
On the other hand
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, wearing a tidy and expensive suit does not speak about the persons' position in the company which
uniform
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 might.
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, a high ranking official in the army gets distinguished and
indentified
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identified
 basis his
uniform
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. Not having a
uniform
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 can act as a threat since anyone can
be pretend
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 to be someone they are not and misuse the power and position.
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, in the Pulwama attacks in Kashmir, terrorists dressed as soldiers to infiltrate the military camp and succeeded in killing many army personnel.
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, it should be avoided to avert any
such
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 future crisis. To summarize, though there might be a few benefits of honing a
uniform
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; there are many drawbacks of having to wear them and their use should be limited to a few mechanical or hospitality
profession
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professions
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cohesive brand image
  • promote discipline
  • enhanced professionalism
  • self-expression
  • standardization
  • identification
  • hygiene
  • cost of maintaining
  • employee morale
  • industry regulations
  • safety features
  • impersonal atmosphere
  • congenial work environment
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