People doing dangerous sports activities scuba driving and bungee jumping, they should be responsible for their own life and rescue workers should not risk their lives to save people do you agree or disagree?

It is true that
people
doing dangerous
sports
activities
they
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should be responsible for their own
life
and rescue
workers
should not risk their lives to save
people
. In my opinion, I strongly agree with
this
statement, and the following examples will be provided in order to support my point of view. One of the most important
reason
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why
people
doing
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dangerous
sports
activities
is that nowadays hazardous
sports
are likely become
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popular in certain groups of
people
therefore
people
doing
such
as scuba diving and bungee jumping should be responsible for their own
life
. Because they should know before that
this
kind of activity is dangerous and have
negative
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impact
to
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their
life
.
For example
, according to the latest research conducted by Bangkok University. It revealed that 70
precent
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per cent
of
people
who
doing
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extreme
sports
tend to have overall knowledge related to those
activities
. Another reason of support
this
is the fact that rescue
workers
are not
responsibility
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to save
people
who
has
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dangerous
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a dangerous
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lifestyle
.
This
is because
people
who
has
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hazardous
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lifestyle
should maintain their own
life
. To illustrate
this
, in
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recant
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news it has been reported that aid
worker
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workers
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who went to
rescued
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people
who had dangerous
lifestyle
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died while on their duty. In conclusion, it is undoubtedly true that
people
doing dangerous
sports
activities
, they should be responsible for their own
life
and rescue
workers
should not risk their lives to save
people
because
people
who
has
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hazardous
lifestyle
should maintain their own
life
, and aid
workers
are not
responsibility
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a responsibility
the responsibility
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to save
people
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inherent risk
  • assume full responsibility
  • acknowledging
  • engagement
  • unduly
  • voluntary risks
  • extreme sports enthusiasts
  • strict safety protocols
  • mandatory training
  • mitigate
  • thrill
  • personal satisfaction
  • endangering
  • rescue personnel
  • drain public resources
  • divert emergency services
  • critical interventions
  • personal accountability
  • consequences
  • moral and practical burden
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