Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also those who are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

only
people
who smoke suffer from many deadly diseases, but the
people
surround
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get impacted
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that smoke.
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is the reason that many
people
say that smoking should be banned
on
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public places. I am in
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compete
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accord with
this
statement and believe that if
government
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is not able to persuade
people
to leave smoking habit
then
at least they should be prohibited
on
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public places.
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, smoking is a dangerously bad habit
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leads to
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of lethal diseases like lung cancer, mouth cancer and many more. The chemicals in tobacco damage
airways
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of lungs, blood cells and
alo
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also
weaken the immune system towards infections. Its impact is not visible overnight, but with
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of time it causes serious harm
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person’s
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health and in long
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it can make
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suffer tremendously from the pain it may give.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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