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With a great variety of social networking websites, people often add complete strangers to their friend lists. Do you think that this tendency helps people to find new friends or is it just a mean to increase their self-esteem? Justify your opinion with relevant examples. Write at least 250 words.

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Nowadays that social networking is developing, generally speaking,
people
 are getting used to accepting strangers as their
friends
 in social media. Some
people
 say that
this
 act is useful to find new
friends
 but some
other
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others
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 claim that
it's
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its
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 only purpose is to increase their dignity. In my experience,
social
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network
 is a place for all purposes but it's mostly used to help
people
 connect with more
people
 rather than helping them feel better about themselves.
First
 of all, all of the old and new
friends
 were one day a stranger to all of us. As the social
network
 world is growing bigger and bigger
people
 start being less paranoid about choosing
who
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 to add to their
friends
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friend's
friends'
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 list.
Social
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A social
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network
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networks
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 can be used to make new
friends
 much easier with different
people
 and opinions. I believe that
,
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social
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the social
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network
 doesn't have limit for the location you are using it and you're able to connect with anyone around the whole world without any problem. Adding
friends
in
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to
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 your social media account is not only for finding
friends
. Apart from increasing the
number
 of your
friends
, it helps you learn different cultures and languages, can be used to help you with your work and studies, and so many other stuff.
Moreover
, it helps you be able to discuss your concerns with somebody else across the world with the same position as you.
For example
, if you're a person in the UK, you can still easily have a good chat with a great student in California with the same goals and aims as you, and you can share your thoughts and pathways.
However
on
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 the other hand, self-esteem is a concept that you can't directly relate
it
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to only the
number
 of
friends
 on the internet. The
number
 of your
friends
 can increase by just accepting strangers
follow
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request
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, but to actually being able to talk to them and increase the circle of your
friends
.
For instance
, you can have more than ten thousand
friend
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friends
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 on a social media application like Facebook, but when it comes to talking and hanging out you have no one; in
this
case
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 the
number
 of your
friends
 doesn't help you have more confidence. On the whole, almost everyone
use
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uses
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 social
network
 nowadays, the difference is some
people
use
 it to find new
people
, some others may
use
 it to boost their self-esteem, and many others may
use
 it for various other purposes; but mostly, it is used to connect with other
people
.
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