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Many people today find that the cost of attaining a University-level education is extremely high for students and their families. What are the causes of this situation, and how can governments, Universities and the students themselves overcome the problem?

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 of studying
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 University seems to become luxurious for many people, preventing those from getting a higher
education
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.
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 essay will explain the reasons for
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 an issue occurring, as well as provide solutions for it. Nowadays, many in
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society have a notion that University-
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 is very expensive for
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students
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 and their families. Several reasons are laying within the fact of higher
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 being so expensive.
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 of all,
universities
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 that want to have a good reputation and attract talented
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 need to hire famous professors, and those require high salaries.
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, people are more willing to attend a University that has a nice campus.
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, the administration of the University has to spend a lot of money to maintain a beautiful campus.
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, the cost of
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 has become so luxurious that it prevents people from getting a degree. In order to overcome
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 issue, the government and
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Universities
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universities
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 need to work together. If
government
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the government
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 could subsidize the
education
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 of
students
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 from vulnerable groups of the society, and help them obtain a degree in technical or other spheres where there is a lack of professionals, it would two birds at once, by allowing individuals to receive an
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 and filling empty workplaces.
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, if a person wants to attain some specific specialization,
Universities
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 could support them, by allowing
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 work inside the school,
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 being able to cover their costs, at least partially. In conclusion, major parts of the society find high-level
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 extremely costly, though government and
universities
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 can assist individuals to obtain a degree by offering a subsidy and allowing
students
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 to work within the school.
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