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the plans below show a public park when it first opend in 1920 and the same park today. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

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The plans illustrate a Grange
Park
 in 1920 and the same
park
 in the present. Overall, The Grange
Park
 is located between Arnold avenue and Eldon street from 1920 until now. The difference between
in
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the past and today is today have new buildings that never have in the past. ,
However
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 some constructions are still remained but in different locations. In 1920, The middle of the
park
 was the fountain and on the west side of it was a stage for musicians.
Furthermore
, There had three rose gardens in the
park
, on the northeast was located a pond for watering plants and on the southeast was a greenhouse. Nowadays, something has changed like the
park
 has a rose garden
that is
 surrounded by seats in the middle of the
park
.
Additionally
, Cafe is
the
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 new building where located in the north, the pond is substituted by a children's play area ,the glasshouse is replaced by a water feature and the stage is taken place at the Amphitheatre for concerts.
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