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It is believed that people should choose their jobs based on income in order to provide security for their families. Do you agree that the salary is an important factor when choosing a job? What other factors should be considered?

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Dear Moni, I hope you're doing well. One reason to
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 is that I miss you and want to tell you how much I am happy to know you. Nowadays is different to find
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 like you. Our friendship is special for me. You are the one who guides me in every situation. Needless to say that your love and positive energy melted my heart. I am impatient to see you soon. I wish my holiday would start so I can come to you. To start with that I have an idea for our holiday. I have an for you if you want, of course.
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 friends are planning an excursion to Turkey. I know how much you love
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 country and decide to write
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.
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 I know you are busy I will be very happy to accept. Later I will tell you more information about it. What is
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 the ticket for the flight is from me. We are organising a big tour in Turkey and
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 many beautiful and popular places
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 as Bosphor and the castle Topkapi. I think it is
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 opportunity to communicate with many people and learn a lot of things. To sum up,
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 all
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 I want to tell you
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 the idea about the vacation. When I have more information I will write
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 immediately. See you soon, my dear.
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