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Today people are using the things and throwing or replacing it with latest models or latest fashion. Do the advantages of throwing away society outweigh the disadvantages?

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The two graphs show information about dwelling
prices
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 in
England
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 and
London
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,
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, make a comparison in terms of average
costs
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 of housing between some regions in
England
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 in 2013. At a glance, there was a significant rise in
costs
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 of houses in 2013, compared to 1995. Noticeably,
London
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 was the top region to have the highest
prices
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 for housing. Contrarily, North East was one of the two areas to have the incredibly cheapest
costs
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.
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 of all, in the
first
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 chart, it could be clearly seen that in 1995,
England
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 had unnoticeable dwelling
prices
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 which were just 125000
pounds
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 on average, comparing
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 to
London
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, there was not a dramatic difference in housing
costs
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 between the two areas - where
London
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 was only 75000
pounds
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 higher than
England
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. But things had changed, eighteen years later,
London
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 wildly doubled its housing
costs
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 to over 425000
pounds
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 in 2013. At that time,
England
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' average
costs
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 were significantly lower than its capital city - nearly 225000
pounds
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 in comparison. Nextly, in the
second
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 graph,
London
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 remained to be the top area to have the highest dwelling
costs
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. The other top four which was South East, South West. North West to have their house
prices
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 around 200000 to maximumly over 300000
pounds
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. Contrary to others, North East was in the bottom place where it had incredibly affordable
prices
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 of housing with only 10000
pounds
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumerism
  • economic growth
  • environmental impact
  • resource depletion
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • technological advancement
  • quality of life
  • social status
  • societal pressure
  • financial stress
  • social inequality
  • sustainability
  • responsible consumption
  • recycling
  • upcycling
  • second-hand
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