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On one hand, nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. On the other hand, nuclear weapons are a potent threat to world peace. Do the benefits of nuclear technology outweigh the risks? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nuclear
power
, nowadays, is used to generate electricity in many parts. Some people say that energy produced by nuclear
power
 is cheap and clean
while
, others argue that they are a potent threat to world peace. In
this
 essay, I will mention the advantages and disadvantages of
this
 approach and will
also
 explain why I feel that there are more advantages. There are several drawbacks to using nuclear
power
. The most obvious one is the
cost
 of building
power
stations
 is very high.
This
 is because the structure of these
stations
 is complex and difficult to build.
Also
, waste produced can be hazardous to humans and the environment. These wastes are radioactive and are created
as a result
 of producing energy.
Although
this
 can be dangerous, skilled workers can make sure that they are
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 properly. Despite some risks, the creation of electricity using nuclear
power
 has benefits as well.
This
 process does not produce polluting gases.
Thus
,
such
 an approach will not contribute to the increasing global warming and will reduce the use of fossil fuels. Another benefit is that the
cost
 of fuel would be very low.
This
 will lower the transportation
cost
 and will, in turn, help the environment as well. Even though the
cost
 of building
stations
 is high, it can be compensated as the fuel
cost
 will be cheaper. In conclusion,
although
 some still argue against using nuclear
power
, fewer pollutants and low fuel costs are reasonable enough to answer. In my opinion, nuclear
power
stations
 should be handled properly by skilled workers and make sure that the waste does not cause harm to the environment.
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  • namely
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  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nuclear power
  • Cheap and clean energy
  • Nuclear weapons
  • Threat to world peace
  • Benefits
  • Risks
  • Potent threat
  • Deterrence
  • Security
  • Accidents
  • Disasters
  • Misuse
  • Balancing
  • Strict regulations
  • International cooperation
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