Art is considered an essential part of all cultures throughout the world. However, these days fewer and fewer people appreciate art and turn their focus to science, technology and business. Why do you think that is? What could be done to encourage more people to take interest in the arts?

11. Describe a time when you waited for something special that would happen. There are a few events in my life where I was waiting for something special but never lost my patients. That’s the reason why I enjoyed it the most when I achieved that thing. I was waiting to get into college. It might not be special to many but it was to me. I did my high schooling in Korea, but before I graduate from
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancement
  • Economic growth
  • STEM subjects
  • Job security
  • Financial success
  • Pragmatic
  • Utilitarian pursuits
  • Art education
  • Inclusive
  • Engaging
  • Contemporary society
  • Social issues
  • Environmental themes
  • Digital platforms
  • Virtual museums
  • Interactive art
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