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Because many children are not able to learn foreign languages, schools should not force them to learn foreign languages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#children #languages #schools #force
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There are many educational institutes compel
students
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 to learn foreign
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 to make them multiple
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 and help them to defeat their competitors in the future. Certainly, as the world is becoming a global village, and the significance of global
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 is becoming greater, it becomes the need of
students
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 to learn
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languages
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, but I strongly agree with the statement that a child shall not be compelled to study
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language
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, especially when they are too young.
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, the introduction of an international
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 into the school module can create confusion for the
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. Since
children
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 can be unaware of the basics of their courses, we should provide the lessons in a single
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, especially with their mother tongue.
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, if we introduce a different
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 lesson for them at
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 early age, it will confuse them in choosing which
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 to adopt.
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kindergarten, the teachers use Korean to educate kids about Korean alphabets, pronunciations and basic words,
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, if they
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 start to teach them English along with Korean, the young
children
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 would probably begin facing difficulties in studies.
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, I oppose those schools’ move to force
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learn
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 foreign
languages
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 because many
students
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 do not have any interest in learning new
languages
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. When a
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 is taught in
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 a situation,
students
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 would not be active in their learning, and the lesson brings unsatisfactory results.
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, in most schools
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 teach foreign
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, there would not be native teachers to teach the
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, and
this
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 would
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 bring ineffective and inappropriate teaching. To conclude, though learning other
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 can be meaningful and helpful for
children
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’s future, in my perception, the disadvantages outweigh the advantages, it is not reasonable to
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children
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 to learn
foreign
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language
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 in
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school.
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