Some people are afraid to go out for fear of being robbed on the streets. Still, there are robberies that happen inside houses. What do you think is the best thing a person can do to ensure his/her own security? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

There are groups of people, who are scared to step outside their
house
, as they think that they would be robbed.
On the other
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there still persists robberies that
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place within the premises of the
house
. It is all basically due to the lack of
security
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a security
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system, which would rather help to reduce
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occurrence
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the occurance
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of
such
instances. Certain measures if adopted appropriately could actually help
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people to save themselves from
such
occurances
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occurrences
.
Firstly
, the installation of CCTV
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is of prime importance in the area, where
such
things
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.
This
would rather enable to ensure double safety of one's
house
or
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near by
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location.
For instance
, nearly 80% of culprits are caught with the help of
this
system installation, which could capture their face during the time of
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.
Secondly
, a person should never keep liquid cash within the
house
, rather they should put it in her/his bank account.
This
would in turn help them
for
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getting robbed.
Thirdly
, It is important to be cautious while travelling alone in
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a location
allocation
, which is not
considerd
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considered
as safe. Always accompany someone else with you and keep your GPS system on, as it would help in tracking the movement, in case if one gets lost.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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