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The maps below show changes that took place in Youngsville in New Zealand over a 25-year period from 1980 to 2005.

The maps below show changes that took place in Youngsville in New Zealand over a 25-year period from 1980 to 2005.
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The maps illustrate shifts
taken
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 place in Youngsville in New Zealand during a 25-year period first in 1980
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then
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and then
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 in 2005.
One
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 noticeable thing that should be mentioned is that
a
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 woodland of a town was cut down for facility needs. In 1980, the town was divided into two landscapes connected by a bridge. The northern side was majorly occupied by trees and there was a small river for swimming and fishing at the centre of it. That zone had
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 a hospital and living buildings close to the sea.With regards to the lower area, it was mainly taken by transport delivering constructions and accommodation. They are an airport, a railway station and a school. The same as
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one
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, trees and cottages were there.
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, the beach area was fully engaged by the railway station. In 2005,
initial
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 dwellings’ space located in the north part of the township was
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 by a stadium and a parking area.
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, the second
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 of the latter was placed near the river, which was added by
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another activity named canoe and golf in the western part of it. In terms of the southern portion, there is everything floral was replaced by buildings
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 as skyscrapers, a warehouse, factories and
one
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 more parking zone. The railway station was continued through and supplemented the second connection between the two grounds. 17:49 Reply Edit Copy Selected Text Pin Forward Select Delete
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