some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools, others however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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a hotly-debated topic that often
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opinion.
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,some say it is of preference to educate boys and girls in distinct
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while it is imperative taking part in mixed
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and accord my opinion.
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of all, separate
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offer
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an opportunity to compete with each other
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the same
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learning more competitive ,
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self confidence
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there is no
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from other
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which is indispensable for the
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to concentrate and perform excellently in
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Rwanda, where all
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are separate is most visited by multiple countries for benchmarking because of
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performance
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separate
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students
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there is no
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sex
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is well established
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,mixed
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have merit and
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demerits
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is
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a drawback in mixed
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that it probably end up developing into a relationship among
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which deter the
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performance
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inspite
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in spite
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there is an opportunity to socialized as it
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student be at a position to tackle life outside world
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others .
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,bullying is
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very common in mixed
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especially
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to
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the
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shy
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will be leading the class
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performance
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will be on toes to get better marks. For
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the dismay of
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performing
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school. To conclude,
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is an environment for learning and
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skill
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but all distracters should be controlled by the
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management
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, separate
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give an opportunity for a student to concentrate fully without
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world.
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