Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are most enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interest than their jobs. Discuss both of the attitudes and give your opinion.

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Some
people
consider
work
to be the most essential aspect of their lives, and they are uninterested in anything else. Others are more inclined towards their hobbies and personal
life
than they are about their employment. In my opinion, both aspects of
life
are important to
live
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a satisfactory and meaningful
life
.
This
essay aims to discuss the same in detail.
First
of all,
ever increasing
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competition has led to
normalization
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of working more than 40 hours a week. Even though
people
might not be as productive as they can be if a balance is restored in their lives, they feel obligated to
work
for more than their capacity.
For instance
,
people
working in Big 4 consultancies lose their productivity and concentration in
work
due to long working hours and lack of sleep.
Consequently
,
this
leads to a decrease in quality of
work
as well as
life
.
In contrast
, the sole emphasis on lifestyle and hobbies can cause financial distress.
Although
some
people
have succeeded in pursuing their passion and maintaining lifestyles, everyone might not have the luxury to even pursue their passion. Even if they do so, they might get into serious financial trouble.
For example
, even though many
people
experienced
an
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extreme
burn out
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in their jobs in the pandemic, they couldn’t leave their jobs due to financial obligations.
As a result
, lifestyle and hobbies took a backseat completely. To conclude, a
work
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work-life
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life
balance is
the
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key to a content and prosperous
life
. A balance needs to be maintained in the
work
environment for
welfare
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the welfare
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of the employees and the
companies
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itself
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themselves
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.
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