Many different countries have most shops and products as the same. Some consider it a positive development, whereas others consider it negative. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, the criteria defining a successful person

has

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changed a lot in our

society

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Although

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history has many examples of

people

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who were not famous

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they were successful in their respective fields. In my perspective, success is defined by a

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ability to perform their duties and not by the fame or the assets they possess.

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, few

people

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the

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society

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might decline the fact that many

people

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who are successful might not be famous. They might be at the top of their race because of their sheer tenacity.

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, recently I met an old man

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I was waiting to board a bus from the Kashmir police station. He was sitting beside me when I asked him for a bus number which

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help me to reach my destination.

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is when our conversation started. During our conversation, I realized that the man sitting beside me

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one of the top players in the securities trading industry. He had a turnover of around 400cr a year. Despite being successful, not many

people

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know him in our country.

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Society

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knows just a handful of

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who are famous because of the media influence.

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, Elon Musk and Jack

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. These

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are famous because they have

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a revolution in their respective industries by surprising the masses with their innovation.

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, they had the skills and ability to communicate with

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such

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a manner that one might

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completely convinced

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their ideas. They have shown the tremendous power of effective communication to the world.

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people

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who are successful are indeed rich in our

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It may not be necessary that they are famous and

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around the world.

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task response

The essay addresses the prompt by discussing both sides of the issue and providing a clear opinion. Make sure to link examples more directly to the main argument to strengthen the coherence.

coherence and cohesion

The introduction and conclusion are well-presented and help frame the essay effectively. Work on improving the flow between paragraphs to enhance coherence further.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

289 words

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