The government should ban smoking in all public places even though this would restrict some other people’s freedom?Do you agree or disagree?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prohibit
  • legislate
  • secondhand smoke
  • public health
  • respiratory
  • cardiovascular diseases
  • enforce
  • legislation
  • public policy
  • autonomy
  • compromise
  • healthcare burden
  • passive smoking
  • civic responsibility
  • health hazard
  • involuntary exposure
  • liberties
  • deterrent
  • cessation
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