Large businesses have big budgets for marketing and production and as a result, people gravitate towards buying their products What problems does this cause? What could be done to encourage people buy local products

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increasing money to encourage consumers
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their commodities.
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to several adverse
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the buying habit of local people which
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cause harm to the regional
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. To the best of my knowledge, the government should take
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to boost sales of smaller companies.
To begin
with, large scale business is sparing no effort to promote their items on all sorts of advertisements.
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, a majority of customers, especially the young
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, are forming the habit to purchase the latest goods to be in vogue regardless of quality and
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necessary
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. A typical instance is that children can squander their savings on some trendy collection of
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cloths
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even though they rarely have any occasions to wear.
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justification is that
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those global companies are going under
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for promoting consumerism which is considered as a
calalyst
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catalyst
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society. On top of that, the authorities need to find solutions to mitigate these issues and improve the competitiveness of merchants. For the most part, it is of paramount importance to organize local fairs and other outdoor activities to thrive the
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between sellers and buyers in the vicinity. On the
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, should customers not
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know about the superiority of the goods and services from regional
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suppliers
, they would not consider to give a try. In conclusion, only the balance between large and small size
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can guaranty the sustainability for economic
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prosperity
of the country. For that rationale, consumers need to choose wisely which products
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the most suitable for their need and avoid chasing
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