You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter explain why you would like the job give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Robertson, Good day, I am Anya, living here in New Zealand. I am writing

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letter regarding the job that I saw in the magazine which I am very interested to apply

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the job is still available. I am

traveling

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there

week and it will be a big help for me to save at the same time earn while staying there. It is not a problem to take care of your kid since I used to take care of my siblings before,

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I love kids.

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and responsible person that you can rely on. I graduated as

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here,

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background to handle your child. I

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know how to do household chores which I think I can use while staying there.

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, during my free time I am asking for your permission to allow me to fix my papers for my application in Canada,

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processing of my papers, it will not affect my obligation in our contract. I hope for your response and consider my plan if you will hire me. It will be a big help for me, and I promise to do my best at work. Thank you in advance. Yours sincerely, Anya

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

Childcare, Nurturing, Patience, Creativity, Early childhood development
Babysitting, Au pair, Engaging, Responsible, Enthusiastic
Safety, Trustworthy, Adaptability, Proactive, Cultural exchange
Activities, Educational games, Language skills, Exploring
Volunteering, Community involvement, Australian culture
Flexibility, Personal traits, Schedule, Enrichment

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