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Universities should accept equal number of males and females in every subject. To what extent do you agree?

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It has been proposed that tertiary institutions should accept the same proportion of
students
 to each course. I totally agree with
this
 notion as it is in accordance with the principles of
gender
 equality and it will
also
 serve to create a more harmonious
society
 and reduce
gender
discrimination
. I believe that universities must accept equal numbers of
students
 from each
gender
 for a particular course that they wish to apply to. The reason for
this
 is because favouring one sex over the other is a form of
discrimination
, which should not be accepted in any civilised
society
.
This
 is because it influences the ability
for
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 people to pursue careers and have equal rights in
society
.
For example
, in Cambodia, where women are not allowed to study at university, they are severely disadvantaged in the workforce and very few are able to establish satisfactory careers. Another benefit of accepting a similar number of
students
 from each
gender
 is that it will lead to a
society
 with less
gender
discrimination
. The basic logic here is that if tertiary
students
 have a chance to study with members of the opposite sex they will be more likely to be able to interact and communicate with the opposite
gender
 outside of school.
For instance
, my cousin studied engineering in an almost exclusively male class and
as a result
, he is very shy of the opposite sex and gets nervous every time he has to talk to a girl. In conclusion, I absolutely believe that tertiary institutions should accept equal numbers of male and female
students
 in order to avoid sexual
discrimination
 and assure a harmonious
society
.
Therefore
, a policy of equal acceptance should be instituted in every country of the world, and any kind of
gender
-based quotas should be abolished.
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