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tourists are likely to visit places where the climatics conditions are unusual to the rest of the world

#tourists #visit #places #climatics #conditions #rest #world
Nowadays, tourists are likely to visit places where the
climatics
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climatic
 conditions are unusual to the rest of the world. In fact, some people
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 see big advantages in these discoveries and exploration but,
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 the other hand, there are
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 of thinking that can only consider some disadvantages in it.
Firstly
, it is important to notice that, as we are actually living in an Era which the
informations
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 are instantly in the palm of our hands, with all the technologies, the impression that we have is that time goes by faster than it used to be, what
automaticly
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 expands our knowing curiosity,
overmore
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over more
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 to get to know what we can not understand and, as well, to
experience
 what we have not been exposed to yet. Been in a place
such
 as the Sahara desert or the
Antartic
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Antarctic
 can be fascinating because people do have experiences they are not used to,
such
 as
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 so much colder
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 nose starts bleeding by the dry wheater, or, in another hand, having a hard issue to talk because of the person's mouth is so dry that it impossibles her/him to talk. Those are clearly disadvantages of it.
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 another perspective, the
experience
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somewhere else
that is
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completely
 different
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 what you are used
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 ends up being
a vast knowledge baggage
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 that stays all over a lifetime.
Besides
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experience
 in which a person can feel as inside of a history book that they read in the childhood, mainly in school times, and it can
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 flourish some hidden feelings. In spite of all that, one thing is a fact: a new different
experience
 (even a terrible one) will change your life for good. That's explained because people
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 mainly
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 their mistakes, so even if the moment of the travel ends up not being what someone's expect, the way it is going to change your mind or either your feelings will
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 in an unforgettable time.
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